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The most improved aspect of this elevator pitch from my last is the length. It's a lot longer giving me more time to go into the newer aspects of what I've researched regarding my product. I also feel, given previous feedback, that I'm less anxious and nervous in this one. I'm speaking slower and more clearly overall. The other thing I changed is holding the camera myself like I'm Tai Lopez or something. He seems to be pretty okay for himself so I learn from the best.
I think you are well educated on the issue’s roadkill can have to the population. I think people who care for the environment and the wild life population will be interested in listening to more about your opportunity. Your research on diseases and mental health are great attributes to your speech and made it more appealing to hear more. Great job!
ReplyDeleteYou are definitely speaking slower and seem more calm. Confidence is key in these things, much better!
ReplyDeleteI can see a huge difference between this video and the last one, the mic and your voice quality were much more effective. It's obvious you care and have knowledge in this topic due to your confidence and fluency when discussing it. I would like to do more research about this topic, very interesting. Using a slow approach when speaking this time made your message more effective.
ReplyDeleteI would say the biggest improvement in the video was your camera angle and demeanor. While the first video definitely made smile, this one seemed much more natural and calm (making it that much more effective). Plus, the camera angle is common to what many bloggers use today, so not only is it familiar, it allows people to better see your facial expressions (which can sometimes convey your message more than words). I also like that the background changes slightly, as well as your focus (literal eye focus and head movement), it gives the pitch a more dynamic feel without distracting the audience in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteI loved it man. the point that you try to convey is essential and you did it perfect. Sometimes your voice would definitely help perfect because it would persuade the listener and viewer.
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